Welcome to The Blogging from A-Z Challenge April 2014! This year, I’m offering up a story – each one 100 words or fewer - for each letter of the alphabet.
Some are heartfelt, poignant, sweet. Others are…not.
I hope you enjoy them.
At the party, she hangs from his arm like a sparkly bauble. First mistress, now second wife.
Accusations, sneers shatter her into shards of shame.
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THE ORNAMENT
At the party, she hangs from his arm like a sparkly bauble. First mistress, now second wife.
Accusations, sneers shatter her into shards of shame.
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Very intriguing especially the alliteration in that last line. Quite poetic. I imagine you would need to be quite confident if that was the position you were in!
ReplyDeleteNick - thanks! That last line is a bit of a tongue twister.
ReplyDeleteI love the emotion your words evoke. Excellent.
ReplyDelete...like a sparkly bauble. First mistress, now second wife. - very succinct, the perfect economy of words to make your point.
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Debi, Sophie - thank you!
ReplyDeleteLove the sparkly bauble line - I can SEE it! Also love the alliteration in the second!
ReplyDeleteAt least she feels the guilt!
ReplyDeleteLiz - good! :)
ReplyDeleteAlex - I wonder if she felt guilty before the accusations and sneers….
How do you do it, every time? These are amazing, Madeline. Every single one.
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Crystal - thank you so much! I really appreciate you coming over here and reading every day. :)
ReplyDeleteOuch. What to think without knowing more about her?
ReplyDeleteSusan - I wonder what her backstory is? And his? :)
ReplyDeleteGood story. It manages to be hard hitting plus have some good imagery.
ReplyDelete"Shards of shame", says so much. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteWow very few words, but so powerful. I can feel her pain.
ReplyDeleteYes, it always seems to go sour for the mistress turned wife, especially if the women in the husband's circle of friends liked and sympathized with the ex-wife.
ReplyDeleteGreat way of capturing that shame and hopefully insecurity. Intriguing, makes me wonder if there will be a third wife...
ReplyDeleteGreat idea for A to Z! Stories told in 100 words or less are very cool.
ReplyDeleteI like the alliteration, especially. It's like one of those things that shouldn't work, but it totally does. :-)
I'm not at all familiar with Capt. Alex or his Ninja Minions, but I approve of him naming his army that way. (Names are very important).
I've only been talking to Tina's minions until today. Have so many people dropped out that I changed sections?
I'll definitely count this as a visit for today, and link this post to my A to Z page.
Cheers, and thanks for the visit!
I love this idea. I enjoy doing flash fiction challenges, because I tend to be way too verbose most of the time. :-)
ReplyDeleteJE, Susan, K - thank you!
ReplyDeletePatricia - in my head, I pictured the mistress-now-wife arriving at a party full of the ex-wife's friends….
Phoenix - yeah, I wonder what HIS story is….
Gene - thanks! As a Minion, I do have sections of the list that I keep an eye on, but I'm also a participant so I'm roaming on my own, too. :)
Cara - usually my flash fiction needs to be cut down while my novels need to be plumped up. :)
Amazingly vibrant picture you painted with so few words. I'm seriously impressed.
ReplyDeleteBeverly - thank you!
ReplyDeleteWow. I love the words you chose to use--"sparkly bauble", "shards of shame". A part of me feels sorry for her...but then, a part of me doesn't...
ReplyDeleteBeautiful story! You have such a way with words!
Kristin - thank you! That's kind of how I feel about her, too.
ReplyDeleteShards of shame....I like that. I imagine her beautiful on the outside, and easy to break on the inside.
ReplyDeleteCynthia - I like your vision.
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