Welcome to The Blogging from A-Z Challenge April 2014! This year, I’m offering up a story – each one 100 words or fewer - for each letter of the alphabet.
Some are heartfelt, poignant, sweet. Others are…not.
I hope you enjoy them.
Lisa and her dollies lay naked in the backyard, pretending they’re sunbathing at Hidden Cove.
But it’s not.
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NUDE BEACH
Lisa and her dollies lay naked in the backyard, pretending they’re sunbathing at Hidden Cove.
A shadow looms. She smiles, reaches. Daddy.
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That's not good! Although dad might be just as bad, because I'm sure he doesn't want his girls lying naked in the backyard.
ReplyDeleteAlex - no, it's not good at all….
ReplyDeleteOh dear ... that's not something that is likely to end well, not even if it's just an outraged neighbour - then again they'd be unlikely to approach a child.
ReplyDeleteTasha
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OMG!! Run and hide! Holy crap how embarrassing to be caught in the buff. ♥
ReplyDeleteThis one is creepy.
ReplyDeleteTasha, Kathy, Donna - it's even creepy to me when I read it!
ReplyDeleteRuh roh ...
ReplyDeleteThat is a lot of scary and creepy packed into a few words!
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Cathy - :)
ReplyDeleteSophie - thanks!
Oh my! Creepy is only the beginning of that one!! :/ eeps.
ReplyDeleteOh, no. Very disturbing.
ReplyDeleteThis is so creepy!! EEEK! You DID warn us, though, so I forgive you :)
ReplyDeleteThat's quite freaking and scary. Very well etched:)
ReplyDeletePhoenix, Susan, Liz, Vishal - I'm starting to worry about creeping you all out so much….
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness!!!! The little girl needs to run and find daddy!
ReplyDeleteThis totally freaked me out.
ReplyDeleteThat ended creepy and scary. Yikes!
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That's quite scary. I am wondering whose shadow it could be.
ReplyDeleteOoooh, that was really disturbing. Not saying you shouldn't write stuff like that, but that one was super disturbing - even for someone like me who loves horror and stuff.
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Beautiful. But I guess I read it wrong, because despite the warning, it didn't creep me out at all. It just made me remember my daddy coming home from work, and the first thing he would do would be to come find me and my sisters. We were often playing outside with our dolls, and he'd just stop by to say hi and pat our heads, then go back to the kitchen to visit with mom. But I can see where it would be spooky, and I should have gotten that from the shadow. But I specifically remember playing outside on sunny days, so you could see Mom or Dad or anyone's shadow if they came up behind us. Either way – beautiful writing, and I'm betting if we put a vote to it with all of your followers, that we would all vote for you to continue these little 100- word stories for the rest of the year. In your case, April is not long enough. :-)
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Chrys - definitely!
ReplyDeleteJulie, Patricia, Rachna - I'm glad the story was so effective.
Jolie - I'm not always thrilled with the stories that come out of me. Some of them make me shudder, not in a good way. I write the story that wants to be told, but I don't always share it with readers. I let this one out because I think it can be interpreted in a couple of different ways - the shadow could be a perverted creep, a neighborhood bully, an alien, a zombie, etc.
Debi - please take away from this story whatever you want. If it's a nice memory, then good. And thank you so much for that lovely compliment regarding stories all year long. I appreciate it, even if my creative muscle is screaming "Noooooo." :)
Eek!!! That's pretty scary stuff. I always thought women who went out to sunbathe were crazy, I mean who wants skin cancer? But okay. Yeah, you need the vitamin D. There are better ways to get it.
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You are such a practical woman, Crystal.
DeleteCrystal - :)
ReplyDeleteYou are amazing with these short wonders. I'm yelling "YIKES" in my brain.
ReplyDeleteIt is amazing that a story that consists of only 25 words can tell us a lot of things.
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Liza, Romi - thank you!
ReplyDeleteoh dear..that sounds scary!
ReplyDeleteGood luck with the A to Z-ing.
I didn't find it creepy, but intriguing. Thanks for visiting me too.
ReplyDeleteWhoa, this one gave me chills. Run little girl, run!! So scary...
ReplyDeleteamazing!!! I remember playing with my friends and our dollies outside but
ReplyDeleteremembering we must hide from that mean shadow lol because at the time
shadows creeped us both out. most of the time it was our neighbor,
the only boy who lived in the area, he was always trying to scare us. Thanks for the smile...and love your short stories
beautifully captured.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant short story :) :O
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Makes me wonder how old these two girls are. No teenager or young adult would reach out to their father while naked. They'd scream bloody murder first. And would a child know anything about nude beaches? Okay maybe if their parents took them there. Such a short story with so many facets to make me think. Good job.
ReplyDeletePro - good luck to you, too.
ReplyDeleteDA - glad you found it intriguing!
Kristin - she should definitely run!
Maryanne, Purple, Jemima, Nana - thank you!
Ooh that one is a little spooky!
ReplyDeleteK - good!
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