Welcome to The Blogging from A-Z Challenge April 2014! This year, I’m offering up a story – each one 100 words or fewer - for each letter of the alphabet.
Some are heartfelt, poignant, sweet. Others are…not.
I hope you enjoy them.
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DOMESTICATED
DOMESTICATED
A turtle separated from its shell will die. Still, David
coaxes his wife outside. She whimpers. Her phobia holds them hostage. One day
soon, he’ll escape. Alone.
But not today.
Her terror slams his heart, cracks it.
He lets her grip his hand and lead him back inside.
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(Previously published in Blink Ink #15)
Such a burden for both of them.
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At some point, he'll have to break the bond. Hopefully with her, but it might not work out that way.
ReplyDeleteTasha - definitely.
ReplyDeleteAlex - I guess we'll all just have to wait and see….
Oh, very sad story today. I can't imagine what that kind of phobia is like.
ReplyDeleteThis is so sad. Phobia is an awful thing to deal with,and it's sad to see it.
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I agree with Alex. If his wife can't improve her life, David must work to improve his own. ~~~ Excellent flash fiction!
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Julie, Sophie - it's sad for everyone in that person's life.
ReplyDeleteJolie - thank you!
I love the opening line that frames this little story- kinda says it all. Great D story! :)
ReplyDeleteWow! This tidbit is very powerful and vivid. You captured the pain and sadness that accompanies all phobias with few words. Well done!
ReplyDeletePhoenix, Chrys - thank you so much!
ReplyDeleteHopefully she will someday venture outside...
ReplyDeleteOE - I hope so, too….
ReplyDeleteWow. Now that is crazy. I love the metaphor.
ReplyDeleteCrystal - the tortoises aren't so crazy about that metaphor though…. :)
ReplyDeleteA sad situation, but brilliantly written. Well done!
ReplyDeleteGreat story! I'm always so amazed to read these types of stories that have so much heart and emotion in only 100 words. Amazing.
ReplyDeleteMJ - thanks!
ReplyDeleteKristin - thank you! I love the challenge of trying to convey so much in so few words.
Hello there. Just stopping by to wish you all the best with the challenge!
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Entrepreneurial G - thanks! Same to you!
ReplyDeleteBrilliant. Wondering what her phobia is. Sun? Or just outside in general?
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Patricia Lynne, YA Author
Patricia - in my mind, she was afraid of going outside, of being around people, in crowds - that kind of thing.
ReplyDeleteYour opening line sets the tone really well... and lends a sense of anticipation... makes me ask, what will come next? Really enjoyable!
ReplyDeleteTerse and to the point writing....opposite my own style like it. THX for also visiting mine on A-Z!....http://bonnieupnorth.xanga.com/
ReplyDeleteVery intriguing.
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