Laurita - thanks so much! Choosing just the right word is one of my favorite parts of writing micro fiction. (Of course, it's important for ALL fiction!) :)
That did a lot in such a short space. It felt quite visceral, like the sea is an evil character of its own. Quite haunting.
It struck a chord with me too because I've just been on holiday in a cruise ship (remember a certain ship coming a cropper earlier in the year?) We had a couple of really choppy nights and on the second one we heard a massive bang and were sure we'd hit something. Turned out one of the balconies had got ripped off the side of the boat!
So short and yet so terrifying. Your word choice made the difference.
ReplyDeleteLaurita - thanks so much! Choosing just the right word is one of my favorite parts of writing micro fiction. (Of course, it's important for ALL fiction!) :)
ReplyDeleteWhoa. That was intense!
ReplyDeletePam - thanks! I appreciate you reading.
ReplyDeleteLove it! Such a striking image and transition at the end.
ReplyDeleteWow! That really was a dark story. Very intense and emotion laden.
ReplyDeleteGreat job.
Donna
Jillian - thank you! :)
ReplyDeleteDonna - thank you. I tried to warn you all it was a dark one...
Oh my, what a disturbing (in a good way!) story! I'm so impressed with your imagery and the punch you pack in such a short tale. Great work!
ReplyDeleteJulie - thank you so much. I'm glad it was disturbing in a good way. :)
ReplyDeleteThat did a lot in such a short space. It felt quite visceral, like the sea is an evil character of its own. Quite haunting.
ReplyDeleteIt struck a chord with me too because I've just been on holiday in a cruise ship (remember a certain ship coming a cropper earlier in the year?) We had a couple of really choppy nights and on the second one we heard a massive bang and were sure we'd hit something. Turned out one of the balconies had got ripped off the side of the boat!
Oops - after all that - I forgot to tell you you've been tagged with the Lucky 7 meme! Check it out at my blog. :)
ReplyDeleteNick - thank you! I'm glad you read the story AFTER you got back from your trip. :) And thanks for the "tag" - I'll be over to check it out soon.
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