Saturday, April 19, 2014

Q is for . . . A QUESTION OF WHEN

Welcome to The Blogging from A-Z Challenge April 2014! This year, I’m offering up a story – each one 100 words or fewer - for each letter of the alphabet.

Some are heartfelt, poignant, sweet. Others are…not. 

I hope you enjoy them.

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A QUESTION OF WHEN

The battle - Bad Thing versus Brian - rages constantly inside Brian’s mind. He stares at his army men lined up on the floor. He’s supposed to ignore bullies. Bad Thing is a bully.

But Bad Thing whispers, itchy words that make Brian want to scratch his brain until it bleeds. He smacks two soldiers across the room instead.

Bad Thing jeers, goads.

Brian kicks away all the army men.

Bad Thing licks underneath Brian’s skin, laps up all his strength.

Brian moans, crawls under his bed.

Bad Thing is going to win. It’s only a question of when.

*****

20 comments:

Sophie Duncan said...

There is a stark foreboding in this piece, very emotive.
Sophie
Sophie's Thoughts & Fumbles - A to Z Ghosts
Fantasy Boys XXX - A to Z Drabblerotic

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Sophie - that's just what I was going for. Glad it worked!

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Underneath the surface, it's beginning to boil. Very tense, Madeline.

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Alex - it's definitely simmering.... :)

Anonymous said...

Yikes. Definitely a scary piece because of the last line. What does the future hold for Brian? Something bad it would seem.

~Patricia Lynne~
Story Dam
Patricia Lynne, YA Author

Phoenix said...

I believe I like this one the best so far. I'd love to read more of this one! Great one :)

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Patricia, Phoenix - thank you!

Liz Blocker said...

I would definitely read more of this one, too. I'm immediately sympathetic to the MC, and totally curious.

Susan Kane said...

The Bad Thing--how did it get there? Why did it choose Brian's bed? Can he find its flaw?...so many questions, wanting answers.

I love your flashes.

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Liz - I really feel for Brian, too.

Susan - glad you enjoyed it.

Nick Wilford said...

Wow, so much tension here. Enthralling.

Patricia Stoltey said...

I fear for Brian as he grows older....and for those who come in contact with him.

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Nick - thank you!

Patricia - good point about the others....

kjmckendry said...

I really want to read more of this one! Great job!

Shannon Lawrence said...

Oh, I like this! Poor Brian. He is going to do bad, bad things.

Rachna Chhabria said...

The tension is building for Brian. The Bad Thing is getting quite evil and nasty.

Cynthia said...

If Brian recognizes the Bad Thing for what it is, there is still hope!

Tasha Duncan-Drake said...

Poor Brian, it sounds like he needs to tell someone about Bad Thing and get some help.
Tasha
Tasha's Thinkings - AtoZ (Vampires)
FB3X - AtoZ (Erotic Drabbles)

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

K - thank you!

Shannon - I hope not but it's not looking good….

Rachna - yes, it is….

Cynthia - maybe….

Tasha - maybe he has and no one believes him…. :o

Bevimus said...

Wow- and the question on my mind throughout the whole thing: what is bad thing. One gets the feeling it's a compulsion to do something very, very bad...