Thursday, April 17, 2014

O is for . . . THE ORNAMENT

Welcome to The Blogging from A-Z Challenge April 2014! This year, I’m offering up a story – each one 100 words or fewer - for each letter of the alphabet.

Some are heartfelt, poignant, sweet. Others are…not. 

I hope you enjoy them.

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THE ORNAMENT

At the party, she hangs from his arm like a sparkly bauble. First mistress, now second wife.

Accusations, sneers shatter her into shards of shame.

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26 comments:

Nick Wilford said...

Very intriguing especially the alliteration in that last line. Quite poetic. I imagine you would need to be quite confident if that was the position you were in!

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Nick - thanks! That last line is a bit of a tongue twister.

debi o'neille said...

I love the emotion your words evoke. Excellent.

Sophie Duncan said...

...like a sparkly bauble. First mistress, now second wife. - very succinct, the perfect economy of words to make your point.
Sophie
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Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Debi, Sophie - thank you!

Liz Blocker said...

Love the sparkly bauble line - I can SEE it! Also love the alliteration in the second!

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

At least she feels the guilt!

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Liz - good! :)

Alex - I wonder if she felt guilty before the accusations and sneers….

Crystal Collier said...

How do you do it, every time? These are amazing, Madeline. Every single one.

True Heroes from A to Z

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Crystal - thank you so much! I really appreciate you coming over here and reading every day. :)

Susan Gourley/Kelley said...

Ouch. What to think without knowing more about her?

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Susan - I wonder what her backstory is? And his? :)

J E Oneil said...

Good story. It manages to be hard hitting plus have some good imagery.

Susan Kane said...

"Shards of shame", says so much. Excellent.

kjmckendry said...

Wow very few words, but so powerful. I can feel her pain.

Patricia Stoltey said...

Yes, it always seems to go sour for the mistress turned wife, especially if the women in the husband's circle of friends liked and sympathized with the ex-wife.

Phoenix said...

Great way of capturing that shame and hopefully insecurity. Intriguing, makes me wonder if there will be a third wife...

Gene'O said...

Great idea for A to Z! Stories told in 100 words or less are very cool.

I like the alliteration, especially. It's like one of those things that shouldn't work, but it totally does. :-)

I'm not at all familiar with Capt. Alex or his Ninja Minions, but I approve of him naming his army that way. (Names are very important).

I've only been talking to Tina's minions until today. Have so many people dropped out that I changed sections?

I'll definitely count this as a visit for today, and link this post to my A to Z page.

Cheers, and thanks for the visit!

Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost (Not Charlotte) said...

I love this idea. I enjoy doing flash fiction challenges, because I tend to be way too verbose most of the time. :-)

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

JE, Susan, K - thank you!

Patricia - in my head, I pictured the mistress-now-wife arriving at a party full of the ex-wife's friends….

Phoenix - yeah, I wonder what HIS story is….

Gene - thanks! As a Minion, I do have sections of the list that I keep an eye on, but I'm also a participant so I'm roaming on my own, too. :)

Cara - usually my flash fiction needs to be cut down while my novels need to be plumped up. :)

Bevimus said...

Amazingly vibrant picture you painted with so few words. I'm seriously impressed.

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Beverly - thank you!

Kristin Smith said...

Wow. I love the words you chose to use--"sparkly bauble", "shards of shame". A part of me feels sorry for her...but then, a part of me doesn't...

Beautiful story! You have such a way with words!

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Kristin - thank you! That's kind of how I feel about her, too.

Cynthia said...

Shards of shame....I like that. I imagine her beautiful on the outside, and easy to break on the inside.

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Cynthia - I like your vision.