Wednesday, April 9, 2014

H is for . . . RUSTY HOOK

Welcome to The Blogging from A-Z Challenge April 2014! This year, I’m offering up a story – each one 100 words or fewer - for each letter of the alphabet.

Some are heartfelt, poignant, sweet. Others are…not. 

I hope you enjoy them.

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RUSTY HOOK

The bar’s neon sign reels her in. As small and shriveled as she is, the bartender never throws her back, throws her out. If he did, she’d drown in her life’s muck, a rusty hook threaded through her gaping mouth, her last wish not for air but for whiskey.

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24 comments:

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

A whiskey drinking fish!

Julie Flanders said...

Oh this is another disturbing one. Amazing metaphor.

Sophie Duncan said...

Poignant and tragic.
Sophie
Sophie's Thoughts & Fumbles - A to Z Ghosts
Fantasy Boys XXX - A to Z Drabblerotic

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Alex - not quite…. :)

Julie, Sophie - thank you!

M.J. Fifield said...

Really beautiful. Like Julie said, an amazing metaphor.

Anonymous said...

Great piece.
You are the 3rd person I've met during the challenge who is also doing 100 pieces like I am. =D

~Patricia Lynne~
Story Dam
Patricia Lynne, YA Author

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

MJ - thank you so much!

Patricia - they're so fun to write, aren't they? And I hope they're also fun to read. :)

De Tout Coeur Limousin said...

Great image with your words. Look forward to your next stories :-) Bonjour from your new follower in France http://detoutcoeurlimousin.blogspot.fr/

debi o'neille said...

Outstanding. I love your work, and I don't know how you can do it in 100 or fewer words. That's amazing.
Deb@ http://debioneille.blogspot.com

Susan Gourley/Kelley said...

Ouch. I think I've some patrons of bars like her.

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Detoutcoeur, Debi - thank you very much!

Susan - yikes!

Jolie du Pre said...

Powerful!

Precious Monsters

D.E. Malone said...

So much impact from so few words - very well done! I'll have to keep this theme in mind for next year! Writing micro stories seems like a definite challenge!

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Jolie - thanks!

Dawn - it's definitely a challenge. I'm still working on some stories for the end of the alphabet. Eek!

Tasha Duncan-Drake said...

Beautiful use of the analogy and so sad to see her state.
Tasha
Tasha's Thinkings - AtoZ (Vampires)
FB3X - AtoZ (Erotic Drabbles)

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Tasha - thank you.

Susan Kane said...

What a state she was in, yet how kind was the bartender. Man. You have some serious skills.

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Susan - thank you!

Suzi said...

That is powerful.

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Suzi - thank you!

Michelle Wallace said...

Another good one!

Donna B. McNicol said...

I can picture the bar AND the woman...hooked me!

Donna B. McNicol
A to Z Participant

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

Donna - ha! I'm glad. :)

Bevimus said...

Seriously Madeline- you are BLOWING ME AWAY with these! Each one is so astoundingly powerful I have to read it twice.