Welcome to The Blogging from A-Z Challenge April 2014! This year, I’m offering up a story – each one 100 words or fewer - for each letter of the alphabet.
Some are heartfelt, poignant, sweet. Others are…not.
I hope you enjoy them.
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VISIONS
“Something bad is coming. Soon.”
Nana says this every week, swears she has The Sight or some
such nonsense.
“You feel it, too.” Her breath reeks of rotting gums and
applesauce.
I roll my eyes, while hers gleam with glee. She feasts on
fear the way vultures feed on mangled flesh. Her ragged nails bite into my arm.
“Ow.” Crazy old lady. I close my eyes, digging deep for
patience. But what I find instead shakes me with bone-shuddering terror,
soul-shattering despair. I slip to my knees, gape up at her.
Nana cackles, pats my cheek. “Told you so.”
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Oooo...good one...
ReplyDeleteGuess she decided it was time for her vision to come true.
ReplyDeleteCathrina - thank you!
ReplyDeleteAlex - Nana was right after all….
I didn't see that ending coming!
ReplyDeleteI love this! Super eerie. Great job :)
ReplyDeleteBeverly - good! And thank you for all your comments on the previous stories. :)
ReplyDeleteOE - thank you!
I think Nana would scare me if I was around her. I pictured the witch from Snow White when I read the part of Nana cackling. Good one!
ReplyDeletebetty
Betty - that's a good visual!
ReplyDeleteThe description in this one is just amazing!
ReplyDeleteThis sentence made me literally cringe in disgust: "Her breath reeks of rotting gums and applesauce."
Chrys - good! :)
ReplyDeleteWowza! I want to read what happens next! I know this is a great short piece, but I still want more. :)
ReplyDeleteThis is simply amazing. I love the way Nana cackles. Perhaps her vision has come true.
ReplyDeleterotting gums and applesauce – what a disgustingly lovely description. :-)
ReplyDeleteDeb@ http://debioneille.blogspot.com
I will just second Chrys' comment because that is what I was going to say!
ReplyDeleteYet another story that caused a chill to run up my spine. :D
Tyrean, Rachna - thank you!
ReplyDeleteDebi, Julie - as long as it's the imagery that makes you cringe and not the writing itself…. :)
Great little story, and I agree about the description...perfectly horrid!
ReplyDeleteNana sounds creepy and I think I'd want to stay away.
ReplyDelete~Patricia Lynne~
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Patricia Lynne, YA Author
Oh man! Poor thing. That is so not a gift I'd like to have. Now slowing time, I'll take that one. Telekinesis? Yup. Levitation? Totally. Cheese eating... Oh wait, is that a super power? Because I might already have that one.
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I really like this one - very direct with a kick in the tail.
ReplyDeleteSophie
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Mere - thanks!
ReplyDeletePatricia - I totally agree.
Crystal - I think there's a lot of us who already have that cheese-eating super power. :)
Sophie - glad you enjoyed it!
Oh Nana...she sounds so creepily sweet...eek!
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by our blog earlier. I admire people who can write short stories like that as it is so much harder than being unrestricted. It does allow for some very descriptive writing as you don't have the advantage of using a big volley of words.
ReplyDeleteSean at His and Her Hobbies
Hey, not all of us old women are creepy. Then again, I can't see what's coming.
ReplyDeleteSK - :)
ReplyDeleteSean - thank you!
Susan G - :)
I felt the character's need to dig deep for patience.
ReplyDeleteOh, sweet Nana.
Silvia @
SilviaWrites
Very creepy!
ReplyDeleteOooh, creepy :-/
ReplyDeleteSilvia, Patricia, Annalisa - thank you! :)
ReplyDeleteSuch a lovely old lady ... not. I feel very sorry for the protagonist. Makes me want to find out what's coming.
ReplyDeleteTasha
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Tasha - I don't think we want to know what's coming, not really….
ReplyDeleteGot the chills.
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